While reading this article I realized that the student understood the message of the article very well and the student explained the message with facts and good details by using an example of how the media sends us thousands of marketing messages per day and how advertisements are implying on how people should live their life. The student understood the message of how advertisement is brainwashing our brains. In my opinion I think that the student should have one a much better job by summarizing the essay better with details that and explaining and mentioning the author’s most important ideas and one of the author’s significant idea.
Even though the student included good details in the essay it would be much better if he/she mentioned the most important details that the author stated and that he/she is more important as well. I think the student could have done much better if he/she would have included a personal experience that can relate to the article or reading they learned in the outside because this is a big part of this assignment. It is very important for the student to give a personal experience related to the article because if not the student can fail the test. I think that the student chooses good words choices that helped he/she organized the essay. I think the student have some problem with the structure of the sentence in making the first paragraph too long.
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